Heine Rammsteiner (Finished)

[Heine Rammsteiner]

Name:Heine Rammsteiner

Alias: The Dark Arm

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Class: Fullbring

Faction: Ootoriha

Rank: Martial Artist/Student

PvP Availability: Permission

Description:


Body: Heine stands at 5 foot 8, his hair is jet black, along with his fair complexion. His brown eyes light up his face even when his facial emotions are docile on a day-to-day basis. Heine maintains an athletic muscular build, and keeps straight posture (this is due to his martial arts training).

There are a few attires that is worn by Heine; a few for each different occasion. Normally found wearing a slim fit two piece suit, black tie, and a blue or white shirt underneath(seen in picture above). However sometimes he can dress casually with a white round neck t-shirt, with red hemming around the neck and the end of the sleeves, dark boot leg cut jeans with orange red stitching. When Heine is travelling he likes to wear a different sort of jacket, still keeping the leather look; this jacket is red and black with a high collar (which reaches towards his jaw line) and two buckle straps that are lined up to his upper torso. The second is a black coat that hangs down to his kneecaps. Within this jacket he carries a blood pack with him so then when using his powers he doesn't use too much of his own.



Reiatsu Color: Auburn

Personality:
Heine's mannerisms and behaviors are strange, whose mentality shouldn't be affected by normal feelings of compassion or sorrow. Heine acts upon these emotions regardless, making him somewhat unreadable. He displays a love for his comrades who treasures so dearly, however that can also be the source of weakness in battle at most times. Heine is a nonchalant teenager, when he meets people at first he can be a bit serious and slightly judgmental; however, when he warms up to the people around him he can joke around in a care free way. Heine would pass up any chance in being a leader, since he knows that he wasn’t born a leader as he sees himself as a recon soldier, and would do anything for the people he needs to protect.


Family:
Tobius Rammsteiner [Grandfather; Alive; Fullbringer]
Giovanni Rammsteiner [Brother; Alive; High-Spec; Whereabouts unknown]
Anton "Preist” Rammsteiner [Gurdian; Deceased; Quincy]

Weapon: His fists and feet

Stats

Reiatsu: 40

Attack: 60

Speed: 70

Weapon Skill: 30

Experience: 0

Skill points: 0

Pvp Rank:

Kill Points: 0(0)

Customization Points: 0

History:

Heine's life wasn't like any other dysfunctional family out there. He didn't know who his mother and father was, he grew up with his Gurdian, "Anton" who looked after his brother and himself. His grandfather stood idly by, however he wouldn't interact with neither of his grandsons. Instead he would only pay attention to those who fought to grow stronger. You can say that it is odd that the only way to see your grandfather is to taking training lessons with him, especially at the age of three. Being forced to memories different styles of fighting techniques, as well as preforming them at will. Heine wasn't the favorite to say for the least, he was far from that. His brother on the other hand was the one to "successes his father" or so what he had heard.

Anton didn't agree with Heine's grandfather, and never had of course of being the best friend of Heine's father. Anton would always rebel, never giving in. It was not until Heine was 12 and his brother 14, that on one night Heine found Anton dead, and his brother looming over his course whilst his grandfather watched. Tobius (Heine's grandfather) beat him to a pulp where he was labeled a disgrace, a weakling. It was then that Heine, the first out of the brothers to release their powers, as Heine kept on swinging with rage he was clumsy, a fool. Even though that he wasn't in the best shape to fight his grandfather decided that he wasn't as weak as that he thought and told him to get stronger.

His brother left his grandfather, and that was the last time that he saw them both. From then on he didn't have a home, he lived in the shed out back of the high school; no one went near there, so he was fine with that. It was not until his final year that he realized that he couldn't stay there, he was getting away with it, however he thought that one day he was going to get caught. Around that time he found out that there were others like him, he arrived at a manga shop and was assisted with lodging, and became a student of a man called Clyde. It has only been a few days since he had arrived and taken up lodging, and from the point that he finally settled in... He knew... He was going to get stronger.



Skills

Free Skill: Reflex Mastery: You can react as if you had +20 to your Speed (Governs only your physical movement).
Level 3

Analyzing (1/3)

Level 2

Hand-to-Hand (1/2)

Reiatsu (0/2)

Level 1

Footwork (1/1)

Weapon (0/1)

Name:Darkarm

Focus: Martial Arts
Even though there are many people with a mind set such as this, Heine was one not to fool around. From a young age he was pressured by his father to study the mind and body. Throughout his years the only thing he could think of is how strong he can get, and eventually get even with his father. After years of studying, practising and forming many martial arts, his father passed away before he even got the chance in doing such things. His focus mainly derives on the regrets on not being able to prove to his father his worth in being a son.

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Whilst he is in battle, Heine likes to think strategic and tends to think whilst in battle, along with being very observant of his foe as well as his surroundings so then he can make the most of them for a surprise attack. He does this because he knows that he is not strong, or fast; however, if he uses his skills, as it might be the one thing that can make a one percent into a fighting chance. However Heine himself doesn't really uses his abilities too much, mainly because he combines his fighting techniques with his powers, also because thinks that his abilities should be used at the last moment, or when the time is right.

Heine is very knowledgeable in many martial arts, he would either fight against an opponent who used these techniques (giving him the knowledge to predict movements), he has learnt these techniques also by watching people spar against others who wielded them, or he would read them with the many books that he posses and creates his own... But even though he is very observational during battle, has precise knowledge in pressure points (in this case he would know what to hit, and what to avoid), and can change between two stances without struggle. He can easily be distracted; especially when there is someone he knows is in risk in getting hurt, he would turn his back on the enemies, giving them the upper hand. Even though he tries to keep his head in the game when he is angry or sad, still his punches and kicks don't do as much damage as they normally would when he is in a raging state.

Description:
Heine can only manipulate his own blood to form around his hands to half way up his forearms to form a hard surface like a glove. He can also use that blood to manipulate it to a Daisho which he can use in transitions of various martial arts.

-Incomplete:
Heine is able to manipulate his blood to make a hardened glove over his hands which reaches half way up his forearms, and feet.

-Complete:
Heine uses his blood to cover his fists and feet, for defence and additional power. In this form he can also cover his entire torso as well in blood, not just his hands and feet. Along with this his legs are covered in his own reiatsu showing that he is a “clad-type” meaning that the reiatsu serves as an 'armour'.

-Final Form:
Within the final form Heine is able to strengthen and produce more blood to cover his gloved hands whilst maintaining the hardened torso and feet; however, the reiatsu that was given has manifested into it's original form. Due to the focus Heine has, it appears that Heine in his final form is wearing pants (used mainly Taikwondo due to kicks making fighting easier with more freedom for leg movement, along with a belt as to establish his ranking.



Attacks:


-Bloody Glove – A hardened lay of blood form from half way up the forearm, covering his hand as if it is a glove, his feet also have the same effect as he then looks like a kickboxer.

-Bloody Sword – The glove can transition and take the shape/form of a Daisho, after the transformation the sword can only be in affect for half a page. After ten posts are completed the blood turns back into the glove form, unless he changes the sword back to the glove form before the 10 post rule.

-Bloody Hands - This can only be used from the blood that is stored inside the his body. Once Heine cuts his hands, two Daisho's come out of the palms of his hands, as his hands are somewhat like the hilt of the sword. [This can only be used for 5 posts, once 5 posts have ended, the two swords form the Bloody Glove. If the glove was already activated prior, then extra hardened blood is layered over the existing once, strengthening the glove again. The glove now is twice as hard as it was once before.]

-Bloody Needles (uses his blood pack) This can only be used once, and most likely when he knows he can't win. He throws the blood pack and can manipulate the blood to harden and burst out of the back forming large impaling spear needles to confront the target. [can only be used once a post, or depending on how many blood packs he is carrying, maximum amount is 2).

-Rope of Blood - The blood on his feet extends out and wraps around his opponents foot, when complete it looks like a Rope made out of blood tied to both Heine and his foes ankles. This gives limited space to fight in, and if the foe strikes Heine uses the rope to his advantage (example: if the attacker runs in for an attack, Heine can grab the rope and pull it up causing the attack to lose his footing and fall on the ground. [Can only be used once every third battle, and lasts for 15 posts].



Heine's Fighting Styles:

So far there are two fighting styles that Heine has constructed with his knowledge

-Hissori-oshi (Still Pressure): Pressure points, Silat, Ninjutsu, Wing-Chun, . It also includes high observational thinking and senses, and you must always be one step ahead. This is one of Heine specialties, and must maintain high observational thinking and knowledge of points of attack. This style doesn't use much strength, since hitting a pressure point isn't about strength but where you are hitting.Wing-Chun's defensive stance is used when facing the opponent face to face. Silat being an indigenous martial art plays a part in both of his gloves and Bloody Knife with the strikes, joint manipulation, throws, bladed weaponry, or some combination thereof.

-Kald Neve (Cold Fist): Kendo footwork, Kickboxing, Taikwondo, Savate and Wing-Chun. Klad Neve is a technique that Heine created to give more strength to the boxing style. The use of the Kendo footwork is used as the lower body part of the stance, making the wielder of this style to step/leap forwards/backwards and not fumble or trip over his own feet. The Kendo stance is also useful when Heine turns his gloves into his Bloody Sword so then he can use the style with a weapon instead of his fists only. Wing-Chun defensive blocks and locks are used within this style, and also as a footing as well as the Kendo Footing, this gives the user other ways to avoid strikes from his opponent. Heine uses various Taikwondo and Kickboxing kicking techniques, along with kicking he also uses Kickboxing's boxing strikes, whilst Savate grappling and submissions can be used.

*This is the only form of style which can use Heine's Darkarm Glove's transition to Bloody Sword, making surprise and fluid attacks due to the techniques footing.

Passive Abilities: 

Extras

[Heine Rammsteiner]

This is still a 'work in progress' however i would like to get some feedback when possible about my Fullbring abilities part of it, since im not too sure how i should layer this out, or i can do it like this. If you can guide me with this, or you have any ideas yourself, that would be awesome!

EDIT: I just realized i called one of the attacks, "Bloody Needles" and is kinda like the one from Soul Eater, but that is just temp/i will change it so then it won't sound like something from SE later on...

[Hitsugaya]

Alright, while its all well and good to state that your character is the type to analyze the situation and attempt the tactical way to fight as his priority, you can't just state that he's "three steps ahead" ir "one step ahead" all the time. Your ability to think ahead of your opponent is dependent upon your stats, and on the skills you've chosen (we are currently changing the skill system).


The attack "Darkarm Glove" is simply stating again the form your Fullbring takes. Having your form dissolve after use is going to put you in a lot of, defensively speaking, bad situations. I would suggest changing that attack so that it instead alters the gloves in some way, to add to the power of your punch.

For Bloody Sword, say 10 pots instead of half a page, because while 10 posts is half a page, if you start the attack in the middle of any one half of the page, it becomes a grey area, where we cannot really determine how long the attack lasts.

And for all the fighting style...simply changing your style won't have much effect in RP, as your abilities don't really change, so someone stronger will easily adapt to the changes. You have to give me a bit better explanation, going more in detail about what sort of attacks each style incorporates. Instead of saying "he stance can change two different ways to just move around the opponent to attack. " for Cold Fist, explain that the style focuses heavily on dodging attacks rather that blocking or parrying. References to existing fighting styles is not very helpful, especially because you aren't staying true to anyone style with each of your three; so instead of those references, and some vague description, describe the type of movement the style focuses on, and the type of attack it uses.

And for Bloody Needles, it doesn't really matter if it sounds like something from another Anime, people come up with things like that all the time, its nothing special. Don't bother changing it.

[Heine Rammsteiner]

Thanks for the Advice Hits, really appreciate this. I went over it, and hopefully it looks better now. I added in one more fullbring attack; if you can look at that and tell me if it makes any sense, or what not if you can let me know that would be awesome!!

[Heine Rammsteiner]

Im finished (or at least i think i am) you be the judge

[Hitsugaya]

Once again, your first attack is restating what form your Fullbring takes, it's not an attack/ability.

Bloody Sword and Bloody Hands, are good, but why not rename the latter to "Blood Brothers", since the action you perform to use them (cutting your hands) is similar to the "ritual" involved in becoming blood brothers, and because there are two swords.

For Bloody Rope, you can remove the limitations you put on it. and we'll have it simply be the strength of Bakudo #4 Hainawa if you are equal to or less than your opponent's Reiatsu, and as strong as Bakudo #63 Sajo Sabuka if you have 100 more Reiatsu.

Finally, once again, you haven't really given me what I wanted for the fighting style. Remove all references to other fighting style. Not everyone watches kung-fu movies religiously, and it's unfair if your opponents have to wiki everything about your fighting styles.

Here's a Suggestion for styles and attacks instead of what you have.

Fighting Styles

*NOTE: Heine cannot switch between Styles mid attack, and can only switch every 3 posts.

[Still Pressure: Focusing on quick light strikes to important areas of the nervous and musculatory systems, Heine uses this style when he needs to avoid his opponents attacks more.

Attacks

Neck Pinch: By quickly jabbing at the enemy's neck on either side, nerves can be pinched, causing disorientation. (Weapon Skill and Speed reduced by 5 for 4 posts) [Can be used 2 times every 10 posts]

Bicep Shot: By applying slight pressure and reiatsu with a quick jab, Heine temporarily cripples the bicep muscles. (Attack Reduced by 5 for 4 Posts on limb effected) [Can be used 2 times, every 10 posts]

Tricep Shot: By quickly jabbing the tricep muscles, Heine can temporarily cripple them. (Weapon Skill Reduced by 5 for 4 Posts on effected limb) [Can be used 2 times every 10 posts]

Palm Strike: By striking with his palms, Heine can transfer energy through the attacks, causing small jolts of pain, but doing very little actual harm.

Chest Palm Strike: By slamming his palm into the enemies chest, Heine can give their heart and lungs a jolt, causing extreme pain for a few seconds.

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The other one you can figure out based on this, but you get the general idea? The ones striked out, are ones you could earn later, but I won't give you at creation if you adopt this suggestion.